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Passion

This is more than just a recital
This is more than just a drill
Watch out, I'm gearing up
I'm a force that you will feel

They say you should follow your heart
Or maybe you should listen to your mind
Friend, I'll be the first to tell you
Your heart  is misleading, your brain is blind

But when you have that burning desire
That fire is your greatest weapon
Your mind and heart say to quit
But it says "Don't stop until you're a legend."

When the time comes and you have to fight
After the battle is all said and done
You can't follow your heart, you have to lead it
Good things happen when you follow your Passion

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I like the soft or near rhyming aspect. I’m not sure if it’s deliberate or not but the structure is obvious but also has an extra or missing syllable here and there. That works well with the near rhyme.

Tim

Yes, the near rhyming was on purpose. I'm glad you liked it! I'm trying hard to improve!

author comment

I agree with Tim on all points. good poem.

*hugs, Cat

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