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in passing the twilight..... friends

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2014-10-04 11:40

see us in golden light

as emerges the
ultimate night

let memories for ever remain bright
when we all are out of sight

till then many a candle light!
while you can
continue the fight
alright!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

alidzain

Sat, 2014-10-18 20:18

alidzain's picture

Death may steal one's soul
but memories are ours to keep
until they grow so old
from our mind, they'll slip

Still the feelings still there
the key to their revival
it will always be there somewhere
be it free or entangled

so fear not the coming of the night
for my love is the blanket keeping you warm
my prayers will grant you the light
and shield you from the coming storm

Alid

Geremia

Sat, 2014-10-18 21:02

Geremia's picture

Splendid poetry.

joe

alidzain

Sun, 2014-10-19 01:15

alidzain's picture

Thank you. Yours is just as good.

Alid

lovedly

Sun, 2014-10-19 12:41

lovedly's picture

you really encourage me
Hope you shall continue to do
all the best take good care
the sun has not set
as yet!

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