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In Passing

Submitted by Depressed 1 on Thu, 2023-02-09 04:37

The rain falls upon my window sills

It must know precisely how I feel

Water runs down my widows as they cry

As they watch me as I start to die

In this place of darkness, I can no longer stay

Look for light; I do not see one single ray

From my wrist, the blood falls

As I stare at the blank wall

The red pools upon the dirty floor

Soon there will not be any more

My body starts to turn cold

Memories my mind can no longer hold

My pulse is beginning to slow

I do not have too much further to go

I breathe my last breath, and I sigh

No one will ever know the reason why

I have no more words left to speak

My mind and body were just too weak

I will pass on from this world of pain

The sunshine will dry away the rain

I will be forgotten in the passing of time

I will be dead in everyone's minds

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-02-09 07:04

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that many can relate to! I don't know what to say, except for: please stay with us and keep writing. your poetry is important! it is good to know that there is someone (you) out there who knows how we feel, or have felt!

*hugs, Cat

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Depressed 1

Thu, 2023-02-16 19:05

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Thanks Cat

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