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Paperdoll

I waited as
she ran across walls
of separation,
watching both sides pull
and tear at skirts
made of paper flowers

each wanting a piece
just a smidgen

with her back against a wall
of cardboard parquetry,
ever watching for usurpers
an entrusting look
passed behind her eyes,
but gave away
to the spark of fear
that followed

Paranoia?
or just a good old fashioned
gut feeling …

~~~~~

She’s swinging her legs
from one side to another,
and her hands fumble
tearing off,
infinitesimal fibers of being

the gut feeling gone,
with the last skein of
paper fluttering on the fence

~~~~~

I look down watching my feet
sliding, from side to side

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You have given voice to the Paper Doll and made her come alive. I need not say more.

much love n hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Its more than just a paperdoll there is another story under the skirts of the doll ;) I know that's meant to be two words but that's the way I spell the title of this poem lol just a small quirk, thanks for the read and the visit I am glad you enjoyed it, I always appreciate your thoughts

much love and hugs Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Of course i know that there would be a story under the skirts of the doll :)

much love n hugs..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Big smile

much love and hugs Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Beautifully written the theme and the imagery are top line, the presentation through the words you use is top line.
What more can I say you IS good, damn Good..
Have a lovely evening, yours Ian.T x

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Damn you guys have got to stop complimenting me or my heads going to be humungous LOL I am very happy you liked this one...I hope your enjoying your time away but your presence is missed...I have been writing all day today its raining hallelujah !! its been raining since early this morning and it hasn't stopped with luck we will get enough rain and they will ease the water restrictions woot lol cross your fingers

love always Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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