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Painting Tomorrow
Passion flows smoothly,
colors of dreams yet to bloom,
chosen by the heart
In truth, we are all painters,
defying the emptiness.
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
raj
Sat, 2016-03-26 15:18
Great Tanka Alid... Regards,
Great Tanka Alid...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Sat, 2016-03-26 16:04
Raj
Thanks for the visit, the read and the comments.
Alid
raj
Sat, 2016-03-26 16:14
I liked the title too Alid
I liked the title too Alid
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Sat, 2016-03-26 16:26
Thanks, raj
:D.
Alid