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Painting Tomorrow

Passion flows smoothly,
colors of dreams yet to bloom,
chosen by the heart
In truth, we are all painters,
defying the emptiness.

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Structured: Eastern
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Great Tanka Alid...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks for the visit, the read and the comments.

Alid

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I liked the title too Alid

raj (sublime_ocean)

:D.

Alid

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