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Paint Me A Picture

Paint me a picture
just any ol' view

Paint me a picture
you can make one or
make two

Paint me the sunset
name what you will
paint me a ride oh
what a thrill

Paint me a heart
for I have none you

Paint me some love
for you and for me.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content


Sort of bittersweet. It’s a little sad but you say it with tact and beauty. The painting metaphors are working because they’re simple and common to all readers.

Well done,

how now I wish
I had been a painter
not a poet ...
to fulfill your wish
but still try I will
in poetry

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