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ORANGE RIBBONS

Along the course I often go
a narrow twisting two lane road
lies a tract whose owner I don't know
bereft of even one abode

Country land not far from town
a mix of forest and fallow glade
years since any hay mowed down
there by men who scorned cool shade

Though unposted, I've not roamed this place
but I've every time slowed down to look
and think to test my halting pace
in search of a suspected brook

But today from sagging fence's brace
on corners 'bout half mile apart
somebody left an orange trace
survey ribbons gave me a mild start

And in the middle loud and bold
on land I didn't know for sale
a new sign simply stating "SOLD"
now stood within a weedy swale

With certain dread I know that change
is soon to come upon this place
which I suspect will soon turn strange
and lose its lonesome sylvan grace

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an enjoyable read from you - this one saying something about our loss of nature

i really like the finish - the final stanza

i did feel that the write was a bit jerky in spots, rhythm slightly out - but that is just me i think - lol
- i know you will say you prefer to sound as 'normal spoken conversation'

it gives food for thought - on reading one is taken to all the times seeing concrete being imposed on freedom
love judy
xx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Stan , you know I am an already a fan of you , I wish I won't miss any of yours . This is not an excptional piece as it well handles a very important theme and I think the orange ribbon works perfectly well to capture the reader's attention to your piece..Keep it up.

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I have Fans!?!? I thought most read me out of pity lol. Thank you for dropping off such kind comment.........stan

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I'm glad you think I captured the sense of loss when the familiar suddenly isn't.............stan

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Not too happy with the lines concerning the fence myself. I'll try to work something out in eventual edit. But I'm glad you liked this and appreciate the visit..........stan

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