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old lust did rust

lusty love
first lust
then love!

How do you say
lust is not a need
after lust only
comes
love indeed

as lovers today
are born each day,
out of wedlock
by lust as they say

when a new babe is born
on a sunny day
many wait for that day

when that lover
new one will grow
in their desired
hubbys way

later lust will be returned
in exchange of love
so love is lust
and
nothing more,
I am quite sure,
what my master
once did say

love lies
between
the thighs

Ah! that’s the only way.

but of course
one has to be right
off course

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Free verse
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Comments

Not sure I can concur too closely with that viewpoint but that in no way invalidates the issue, nor the fact it is well written.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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as we age
we change
at least in perspective

author comment

One of your pieces that has dragged the soil once more, maybe we should issue you a challenge.
The one that writes the best poem about changes, be it seasons weather or just the mind, a title of Changes will suffice.
Getting away from this inner thigh bits and lost loves lol.
A good write though but I do challenge you to write at least 30 lines on Changes,
Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

read my comment
as quickly as you can
shall order a medical change
as you need it
may be
soonly

author comment

I have created a blog for your poem on Changes and there will be a few others joining in so be at your best..
Yours, as always, Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

reversed
I have posted poem first
now 'tis a comment
for you
second
at worst

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