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THE OLD DEER STAND

There's a man I never met before
yet I know him just the same
and think about him often times
as I pass by a ruined tree stand.

This deer stand I first saw long ago,
a few boards clinging to a dying cedar
with most of it upon the ground
slowly burning by decay.

The stand was old when I was young.
I suspect its builder was long gone,
his sons, perhaps, were near my age
and like me have since become bald or gray
as the last boards clutching the tree,
boards which creak like old joints in the wind.

That builder, I can almost see,
sitting up there hunting deer
with cold numb fingers and toes
on this ridge which never changes.
He, too, cherished this lonely place.

I see him watching grey squirrels play
and listening as wood ducks flew by,
slowly wiping a drippy nose,
carefully scanning the landscape
in search of antlers
so very long ago.

I guess like me he slowly aged
and counted time by hunting seasons
as trees overtook nearby fields
and his father's generation slipped away
while the years piled up unnoticed.

Until one autumn he failed to come.
No repairs to his favorite stand.
And the forest likely hardly noticed
for the land and game abides
and keeps abiding.

This old man who I never met.
This old man I have come to know.
This old man who once passed this way.
I know him for I have become him.

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Comments

I never talk about my own dad..a little guy..happy..glasses..knew many..and solid..
we never took up hunting..my mother fearing it like everything..my brother did..
I was working all the time then....He wrote poems..more robust and jolly things..
but noting just as many....I like this slower careful write...I like how you noticed
the stand...like me you would be looking about thinking if it was a great spot
the lumber hauled in..the saw..hammering....the satisfaction of it holding his kit
and he..coffee thermos...whiskey perhaps....And then watching it through the
years growing old as it too grows old..as he too grew beyond...and others..
and happy that like he...you are him....unfailingly hearing what he did and
noting it too...the things important in age...like seasons towards our winter...
I always like your writing of the bush...I travel through it..worked near it long
enough ago..now a bona fide city man....the poetic jaunts you take bring me
back there....I miss the woods very much...I am happy you are able to go there
and experience this and bring it back to share with your poetic gift!

Just when I think I've found some "secret" place to hunt, I often look around closely and spot the remains of an old stand. Just goes to show that the forests go on and on whether we do or not. Barring some type extreme change in the land (such as a development or major highway, the deer run the same trails and the streams still flow the same courses. I'm pleased you were reminded of some earlier happy times by this little scribble...........stan

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