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Ode To The Queen of All Evil...

Submitted by Geezer on Sat, 2015-09-19 17:28

The Queen Of All Evil
Sitting next to a Chevelle
Sneered and said
You think you're bad
But I'm straight from Hell

My Bobby takes good care of me
And I always get the best
I'm black trim and red hot paint
Not like all the rest

Thirteen skulls on my hood
Amidst the flames on black
I have my temper-tantrums
I'm the cross on Bobby's back

My middle name is Done Twice
Sometimes it is Done Three
No matter, what I'm looking good
And it don't come for free

Chucky has his Stephanie
And I am Bobby's choice
Hear him say my name
Hear it in his voice

Now, when you get to voting
Make sure you write my name
Or Killer will come to see you
Your knees won't ever be the same

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Structured: Western
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scribbler

Sat, 2015-09-19 22:45

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And here I was all ready to read about Hillary lmao. Enjoyed your poem anyway........stan

Geezer

Tue, 2015-09-22 19:24

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has a 1972 Chevy Nova that is just as described. He has Chucky and his girlfriend sitting on the windows and I'm sure that he gets lots of votes from the kids, [ who just love them ] that come to the shows and vote for the Best of Show and Spectator's Choice. We take my motorcycle and "The Queen of All Evil" to car shows all summer long. The Queen has won so many trophies, that he has been keeping the latest ones in the garage! Over the last two years my bike has won about a dozen awards and this year got her first Best Paint award! The bike is painted the same colors as the car and has the same flames [ minus the skulls ] If you go to my page on face-book, you can see pictures of them both. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. It was written for Bobby and at the suggestion of one of our friends. ~ Gee

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Seren

Wed, 2015-09-23 13:23

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This is just awesome !! Rhythm and rhyme divine !!

I am sure Bobby loved it as I do its a cracker ...

Sorry if my comment is short I am getting weary here in the bitter cold, coldest spring I can ever remember but in saying that I don't seem to be able to warm up ever lol

Much love always J xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Geezer

Fri, 2015-09-25 19:32

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Bobby does love it! I'm glad that it could bring you a smile, [I hope]. Put on the tea, get another blanket and sit in the sun! Love and Higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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