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Notional time –piece

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2014-09-01 22:56

Time Yeah...
I too have not worn a watch
since the late nineties...

my cell is packed up

my sleeping timings vary...

so I rely only on my laps- top,
it sounds! Me

As I am jobless,
I need not bother about time
unless,
I have to catch a flight
but
many are ready to ensure
I don't miss it, right,

No not for me
but for their own peace,
good riddance
to bad rubbish eh!

So why should I need to wear
even a digital time piece
can anyone tell me..
am darn sure someone
silly one will hopefully

let me save the cell battery
any objections
be over ruled
without being jittery.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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mand

Tue, 2014-09-02 04:53

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I like the humour in this one! Time falls into the background as we get older!

Still smiling!

Love Mand xxx

lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 09:41

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i just read time... produces three kinds of minds

one discusses higher levels of thoughts

the second concentrates on others thoughts

and last mind keeps discussing other ones... who have a mind
as such folks have no mind OF THEIR OWN

Which class do you own.... Mand??
anyway thanks
humour is spice of life
helps erase cancer tumour at least from one's mind
doesn't it? mand!

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mand

Tue, 2014-09-02 14:52

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Definitely the first one! lol ( unless you have any other suggestions ). He he

Loosed! maybe set loose would be better! what do ya think?

Life is a riddle ready to be solved!

Love Man xxx

mand

Tue, 2014-09-02 10:01

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Which one do you think I have?

lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 14:58

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have heart
and
hope for folks like me

who stand apart so lonely

in a long ending queue
where are we
and where are you

in this long queue

I alone trail behind all of you

as I feel shy
to join any workshop
to prove as a shock
yes Loved
knows no nuances of poetry

yet how does he produce gems
ask Jess.
can any one guess.....

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mand

Tue, 2014-09-02 15:26

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Your personality shines through your poems! Like the rest of us, sometimes you hit the jackpot (I know that because I've read them ) other times there is a hole in your bucket! ( all poets have that problem ). Rejoice with the jackpot - a hole in your bucket is what neo should be for!

Do you know what! workshops terrify me - because of my lack of education and general knowledge - if there is one thing I have learned about you it's that you have a vast knowlege - bet you'd make a great contribution!

Give the workshop a go - you might surprise yourself - and at the end of the workshop you'll have learned a little bit more that you already know!

lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 15:39

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I like to have instant dialogue... it appears one is around

you flatter me and am about to burst
when I was in school ... my school senior gal said
seeing my tattered dark green pullover
more pulled than over
and she said
nearly six decades ago

xxxxxx friend you are more
HOLY THAN RIGHTEOUS
she apparently meant holey!

So holes in by poetic
BUCKET
are only bigger than my butt
I suppose
but without that
which poet can one expose.

I have since age eight
poetry composed
but know nothing still
we all suppose.

and rightly so!

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mand

Tue, 2014-09-02 15:42

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Can't stop laughing! What a way to end the evening! ha ha ha

:) xxx

lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 15:49

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she still remains ...
sealed in the window of my eye

I can neither open nor close
she simmers from within to glow
she wants me to know
that without her charm
I cannot grow
and
so she continues to show
the shades of lipsticks she adorns
so often changes my mind
to be taken
lest I yield to someone else's
machination

she beguiles my imagination

is beguiles....
the right word here
I wonder...
Esker

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lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 14:09

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loosed

your use of the word
loosed

is indicative of your''' ownness''
intelligence mand

rarely used
yes loose is often

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alidzain

Tue, 2014-09-02 15:56

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do tell the idiots
who declare they have no time
their words are absurd
since they're still alive!

eveyone have 24 hours
unless you're in another dimension
that amount is ours
so own it, don't waste even a second!

Alid

lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 17:34

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but all digits run slow
as the earth becomes heavier
with greater population
and becomes slow
so more than 24 hours
we show

did u know the earth is now obese??
hahaha
measure its dia
and compare
when you were not
born there.

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lovedly

Thu, 2014-12-04 14:30

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Any humour out there ?
I wonder

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