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Nothing Left To Give

Depleted, wary
Drained of all my senses
For a moment, I was alive
But succumbed to numbness

Try as I might
There is nothing left to give
Drowning in memories
Choking on my tears

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Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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I’ve said these words so many times in so many ways. I’m pretty sure you say it better, though I wish you didn’t have to. Get some rest tomorrow’s absurdities await your embrace. Excellent poem that is highly accessible to any reader in both language and subject.

I’m here often so don’t hesitate,
Tim

Thank you for your kind words and understanding. I am grateful for my Neo family.

~RoseBlack~

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I’ve said these words so many times in so many ways. I’m pretty sure you say it better, though I wish you didn’t have to. Get some rest tomorrow’s absurdities await your embrace. Excellent poem that is highly accessible to any reader in both language and subject.

I’m here often so don’t hesitate,
Tim

I strongly, heart-wrenchingly feel it! get through today as best you can...

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Yesterday was a rough one...today we shall see...

~RoseBlack~

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I am sorry to know you're experiencing such difficult emotions. I must say the piece is so expressive and you were able with so few words to feel what you udergo.
I know you can overcome whatever difficulties you're facing because you know are able to point out your problem. Time and writing will hopefully heal the wounds.
Keep them coming.
We're listening .
Be safe dear.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Writing certainly serves as an outlet. I am grateful for my Neo family always willing to lend an ear and support. Part of what makes this site great!

~RoseBlack~

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So short. Gets a point across well, tho.

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Sometimes less is more

~RoseBlack~

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Hi, Carrie,
Affecting and concise poetry. I'm reading a few days after you published, and hoping you've had better days in between. Warmest regards to you.
L

Thank you for the heartfelt comment.

~RoseBlack~

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for you!

so long to get back to this one. I must have missed it when I was having a sick day. I feel like you should have a much better time of things, since life has been so difficult for you the last year or two. You know you have my ear and anything we can do, just ask. I liked the work, but not the subject, I hope that things are better for all of us this year, especially you! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thank you! It sure has been a rough couple years for all of us. I have had a lot of sick days recently myself. I appreciate the kind words and the read as always.

~RoseBlack~

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