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Nostalgia What a Lovely Dance

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2023-02-07 03:55

I wanted to dance
with a young one
she didn't like my advance
she did not like to shun
but said simply for fun
her Boy Friend
was about to come

She missed all the fun
the night was full of dancers
enjoying delighting

her date never came
she had made an excuse lame
she lost a lovely night's game
o what a nostalgic shame
decades have since lapsed

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-07 08:29

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Yes, many people, not just women make that mistake! There are men who do not approach women who do not meet their
criteria of beauty; missing out on a fun night. A few dances and pleasant conversation do not mean that the night should finish in a lover's embrace. If it happens yeah... but many of both sexes, feel like that is the purpose of going out to party, and a person should not view that as the sole reason for going out to have a good time. As per usual, a good read. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Tue, 2023-02-07 09:27

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I really thank thee all these years you have been with all incl me very sweet and kindly Friendly Thanks Geez
This incident happened when I was emerging from my genes and teens
decades ago
wow still I remember her ...she was dashing egoistic beauty ...none ever touched her ...as we knew it later and sad none married her ...sad a beauty wasted
Now gone with the wind...
Hurray!

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-07 11:42

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No matter how many times I have abused you, you always remain the sweet and lovedly. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Tue, 2023-02-07 12:34

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have I any options
then tell me
a learner poet
that I still b
@83

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