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Nobility, Ambition, and Self Awareness (Purple)
Standing in his majesty
A step before his throne
Velvet robe of satin plum
Without a queen, yet not alone
A magic scepter in his grip
Circlet circumvents his head
The wand is topped with amethyst
As is the crown that weighs like lead
The dais is adorned with care
Lilac, iris, lavender
That compliment the tapestries
Which dance like flames the air does stir
He deems to build a better land
Haughty dreams, utopian
He knows not if he has the strength
His stern resolve should carry him
Better for the common serf
Not so for the lords
Neither for the barons who’ve
Some large ambitions of their own
Left alone with knowledge of
His imminent demise
He has been forewarned you see
Intelligence from royal spies
Gathered penitent at court
Confronted by their king
Sentence not yet given forth
Axman’s bell has yet to ring
There in splintered shafts of light
Shards of summer wine
Intoxicate their callous hearts
As they are pardoned down the line
The sovereign knew a secret see
He learned about himself
Days gone past he thought like them
Pursuing only earthly wealth
It happened when he lost his Queen
Seeing red and feeling blue
Began to mingle, intertwine
Hope, born in his heart anew
The love she brought and taught to him
Cool clear spring by roaring fire
Showed him places in his soul
Launched his self awareness higher
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Structured: Western
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My favorite of the color poems for the challenge save maybe brown. Four more to go.
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Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.
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Geezer
Sat, 2022-07-16 21:02
Sounds as though...
the king may have a new heart to go along with his new clothes?
The title is good, the rhyme is perfect and the story is well told. I enjoyed the tale of a repentant monarch! Would that it really could happen!
~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-07-16 22:51
Sounds like
My kind of king. A wonderful story and use of the color purple. Love the flow and title.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-17 06:41
dear Rosewood Apothecary,
uneasy lies the head who Wears the crown (?) he wants to do right by his subjects. but he has heavy opposition.
neither for the barons who’ve
Some large ambitions of their own
this kinda reminds me of the book titled: "Dune" by Frank L. Herbert (sp?)
good poem!
*hugs, Cat
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-17 07:15
I am
A huge fan of sci/fi. I have read Dune twice. Never thought of it while writing this but it’s got that Paul Atreides feel to it. I think what I’ve got going with these color poems is more akin to medieval feudal systems and ancient civilizations. The Realms of Emotion” may be an apt title for the collection of ten that I composed. In the red kingdom it’s all passion and anger and the Queen of Hearts gives no care to the common archer. In the purple Kingdom there’s a king without a queen looking to lift the common person higher (Charlemagne type). A few are more primitive and harken a time when the first societies were forming at the advent of agriculture. Blue is classic philosophy (Socrates). I was hoping for a loose theme with the same feel. Something old as humanity, something in us all.
author commentGeezer
Sun, 2022-07-17 09:10
You have succeeded...
admirably! I could go for a series of these. ~ Geez.
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Warrior Princess
Sun, 2022-07-17 19:36
I would say beautifully
I would say beautifully penned indeed. These verses resonated,
It happened when he lost his Queen
Seeing red and feeling blue
Began to mingle, intertwine
Hope, born in his heart anew
The love she brought and taught to him
Cool clear spring by roaring fire
Showed him places in his soul
Launched his self awareness higher
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "