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NO JUSTICE

Let her cry her mind,
allow her to pour away her boiling anger
don't beat her and still shush her
at least, let her cry,
A common man once said.

A man that talks about justice
is like two fighting elephants
who will spare the grass
and take them to the beach.

These your eyes seems fixed
Yet the rich and the poor you seem to know
Your spear is mostly against the poor
Oh lady, why?

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Hello, Chiori,
So many images that fit your title. Your poetry always takes me around the world and opens my eyes. This language is rich and strong and leaves me feeling empathetic and filled with conviction. The last two lines baffle me, yet I can sense how important they are.
Thank you so much,
L

The way people buy justice in Africa particularly Nigeria is frustrating am sorry to say this but it got to change, there should be justice for the common man

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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of the class struggle. Interesting.

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Exactly

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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