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NEW NAIRA CHAOS

The abrupt decapitalization
have set hovering dark clouds
Cash flow seems mysterious
but, in reality is just a
case of mathematics
The chief policy makers
have awakened a swarm of bees
thronging on every financial institutions
We're now stranded birds

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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As the scarcity of new naira notes stifle economic activities, the Central Bank of Nigeria has attributed the continued scarcity of new naira notes to hoarding in certain quarters of the country.
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This is really good but I have a two or three suggestions, whichever way you look at it

have set a hovering dark clouds

Either remove the *a* or the *s* on clouds.

have awaken(ed) a swarm of bees

Other than those suggestions I think this is a really solid write

Well done!

Kind regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

a lot dear Seren for the eagle eye. Edits done!!!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Well done that reads much smoother now.

Glad I could help!

Kind regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

You're are the best
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Jeez this sounds volatile. I hope you’re safe?

Tim

are no longer safe! I couldn't get a dime in my own bank today after spending 5 hours. All efforts was a futile attempt. Bank officials telling us NO MONEY IN THE BANK. Very frustrating!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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I wish you good luck. I hope they rectify the situation posthaste. What an injustice. I’m so very sorry.

Tim

It's a strong- standing issue. Worsening day by day. Both the rich and poor are bearing the brunt. The funny part of it, we had to buy our local currency. Very terrible situation.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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is already a mess! Everything turned upside down. Poor masses are the victims. The old notes ceased to be legal tender since 10 of this month yet the availability of the new notes are not to be found in any of these banks. People are dying here.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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