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Nevermore (by: eddy styx) senryu string of five

Senryu String: Nevermore (by: eddy styx)

angelic face, love
ever my focus flower
dreaming in your arms

in awe cannot speak
my head full of your essence
precious beyond stars

inspired loving
gracing me in ecstasy
never another

fleetingly time flown
over many lives and moons
in death gone to sky

labor beyond love
hoping to capture her poise
angel hosts give voice

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very well done! You have not missed a beat!

"in awe cannot speak
my head full of your presence
precious beyond stars"

Your love speaks for itself! She is such a lucky woman!
~ Geez.
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thank you for reading and commenting. I have to admit, I learned a bit from (the) cat! have a grand day and night!

ever, eddy
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Wow this is magnificent, truly its beyond beautiful.

in awe cannot speak
my head full of your essence
precious beyond stars

That's just superb writing.

((((BRAVA)))) yes I yelled that lol

all my love Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

you make me feel like a bard, and not just a poet, you are something incredible!

thank you for loving me! Sis

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Delicate, well written and you could feel the love in every line. Great job

~RoseBlack~

I love Senryu & haiku! but I more often find my voice in Senryu. I can't wait to read your next poem, no matter what the style!

*hugs, Cat

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