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Nature of things

Silence, the trouble around the flower.
In my ears.


Bees calmly collect,


When I close my eyes, shut my eyelids,
listen to the silence.

Collect my thoughts.

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This is awesome.


I agree, this is awesome! Sometimes our minds are very much like bees buzzing around, and we need silence to calm ourselves and collect our thoughts. But even within all their buzzing, bees are calm and peaceful. That is their nature. Lovely title and theme.
Thank you!

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