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Naked Autumn Trees

Seeds- Root-Trunk-Branches –
soft feathery leaves
raindrops
small still
Spell bound nudity,
I am the autumn tree
lanky trunk
in cold winters breeze
I freeze...

My bark -like thin skin
tightens---
the warmth within me
I ought to contain
Autumns will come again and again
but for many years
I have to sustain...

My multi colorful leaves
strewn across the fields
still remember me as a mother tree
now stark bare and nude
but still lovely
why has it, its kids now abandoned.
lonely isolated leaves do wonder.

Out in the whiteness of snow
now I stand naked all alone
hoping spring will spring- soon enough
to re-clothe me

I will face many more autumns similarly
so friends abide with me
I stand stark naked
nude yet so lovely
all come to admire me
not birds only...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
PURE IMAGERY
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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that I shall never see, a poem as lovedly as a tree"

Trees are the lungs of the world
the home of birds and the little squirrel
A bare tree, without its' cloak or dress
is like a love and tenderness.
~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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I hope it's kindness
GEE FRIENDLY are thee

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Of course, it's friendly! A kindness, if you take it that way! You're always my friend ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

kindly friend since long How happy I'm you two hold my fragile hand

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and you are there to appreciate it!

*love, Cat

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Not seen you lately hope you are well
the poem has been appreciated by many
YOUR KINDNESS

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having dental problems causing migraines. tomorrow I see an oral surgeon. thank you for thinking of me.

*love & hugs, Cat

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And reply in kind, thanks.

The more I hang around and get a feel for everyone and their specific styles the more I enjoy these reads. This one is really well thought out and conveys your idea pretty flawlessly.

Really great idea, good execution,
Tim

I have 7 decades experience only off the cuff poetry poet readers like you are friendly thanks be alongside me keep reading-

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And I’m appreciating it more and more.

While I like this piece, the last two lines weaken it, IMHO.

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