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Nacreous

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Thu, 2022-12-29 16:39

Inspiration from on high
Illuminating morning sky
Translucent clouds are nacreous
Spectral, quilted and tumescent

Conversing over love and life
Colors match the current mood
A voyeur to their heart-to-heart
Yet I never hear a clue

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-12-29 21:47

I love this

Everything about it. Your use of language, the relationship between the clouds and sky...another fabulous write.

~RoseBlack~

Candlewitch

Fri, 2022-12-30 06:23

hey Tim,

what happened? did you swallow a dictionary? lol, I had to look up two of the words. and found that they fit beautifully in your poem! I love it.

*hugs & love, Cat

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-12-30 08:43

Smooth...

The rhyme and near rhyme are fitted together seamlessly, the tumescence of their relationship, give the clouds and sky a special feeling of togetherness, the colors of their birth. ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-12-30 08:54

I do like a trusty thesaurus and I lean on it. This is a case where I discovered the word nacreous and I’ve been thinking about it. We’ve had three days of really good sunrises and sunsets here and yesterday the clouds were rainbow colored or nacreous. It’s a rare occurrence and like the handful of other times I’ve seen it, it was very subtle. So it’s an exercise I call “proposing to a word” once I use it as the focus of a piece I’m married to it and I’ll usually remember it.

Now tumescent, I just couldn’t bring myself to use “puffy”. Lol. I suppose I’ve proposed to that on too.

Thanks for your support,
Tim

I got some time off today so I’m going to perform my functions. I promise. Lol

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-12-30 14:34

Excellent...

I wouldn't change a thing! I like the explanation about proposing words and marrying them. I pride myself on having a fair size
vocabulary, but there are times when a word that I must have used a long while ago, just suddenly pops into my head. I always look it up somewhere, like Crossword Dictionary, etc. It simply wouldn't do to use a big, fancy word and get it wrong. LoL I like everything about this one, the language, the pace and theme. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Fri, 2022-12-30 18:35

Nacreous

Hi, Tim,
Not only are these words extremely interesting, but they have a lovely poetic sound and flow, as does the entire poem.
L

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