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My Wild Rose

Submitted by C. Wolff on Thu, 2022-07-21 14:24

You were wild,
A tempest,
Free and unyielding,
A restless soul of great visions,
Loneliness your happy companion,
As you shattered the common,
With ink and pen,
You left us breathless,
As you breathed into us,
A new beginning,
For those who loved without regret,
And lived without fear.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
For the writer who writes fearlessly.
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week July 17th through July 23 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-07-21 15:53

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I love your imagery. it jumps right off the page at me! the beauty of this poem feels pristine and pure. inspiring... I want some...

*hugs, Cat

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C. Wolff

Thu, 2022-07-21 15:55

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Thank you so much! :)

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-07-21 17:59

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a favorite of mine. I like the simplicity and untamed feeling of this. Nothing that I would change. If I haven't welcomed you personally, welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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C. Wolff

Thu, 2022-07-21 19:22

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Thank you so much!

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Rosewood Apothecary

Thu, 2022-07-21 18:55

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Another great offering. My suggestion if any would be

You left us gasping,
As you breathed into us,

Choose any word you feel works. Conversely could change the verb “breathed” in the second of those lines. It’s a matter of sounding redundant with to forms of the verb “to breathe” only separated by a few words.

Other than that it’s another amazing poem,
Tim

C. Wolff

Thu, 2022-07-21 20:44

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Thank you for the feedback! Much appreciated :)

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Lavender

Thu, 2022-07-21 20:23

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Hello, C.Wolff,

A very passionate poem. It always surprises me how poetry reveals itself while in the process of writing it. I feel the revelation here, almost like an awakening. That "aha" moment that leaves us breathless.

For me, I am wondering if I would feel a little more apt to "live without regret, and love without fear", but I still understand the inspiration.

Thank you!

Lavender

C. Wolff

Thu, 2022-07-21 23:01

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Thanks for the feedback:) Appreciate it.

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RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-07-21 22:07

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Nothing I would change! Excellent flow and language! I look forward to reading more.

~RoseBlack~

C. Wolff

Thu, 2022-07-21 23:03

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Thank you :)

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