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my twins today

He longs for her

This is a beautiful
longing for one to be longing
a different take from my make
I long for her
that she may belong to someone
who will love her
and
not only savour lips
for a momentary bliss
nor make her feel
and
believe
you love her still
as you wish
to enter into her fish
with all your force and will
and
seal as you hers’ steal
and
then run away like a seal

it’s not longing
then 'tis only avaricious omen
when in and done with

so don't long a moment
more
till you convince her
and of yourself you are sure
what more!

Read it carefully i
I don't waste time normally

Why delay he asks of me

For sake of failure
and
fear of failure
including divorce
we have to go slow
less of remorse
we go slowly
as we do at the one night stands
just to practice
and
gain confidence
Diversity of environment
is a curse
we may land up being worse
ere we curse
our misdoings man

women love to delay
as long as they can
ere runs away the man...

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Said I wouldn't comment again but then you write this loved your so capable of amazing poetry sometimes and grrrrr frustrate me lol

Love Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

do you really mean it ???
wow
I have finally become a poet
some how

Jess r u listening
now my poetry Is glistening
would you say something?
too
but not the usual way
you do

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SEE! we wait for you to write, sometimes many months, then the wait is worth it.
This is one of those pieces so why you waste so many words in between I don't know and this is what upsets Jess as he also knows you can write, not lazy are you????
Take care Young Bard, Yours Ian..

PS:- there are plenty to read and comment on or do you want me to send you a book on classic poets ???

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

SOS SOS SOS
before come jess
tell me where r the gaps

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Talking about the pieces you stream in between the good ones lol, Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

next one is TRIPLETS
just await

PRACTICING SHOUTING?

No at home
he has no voice
so let him practice
like a lion
in the forest

as he comes home
again he will be
like a mice
in front of his
beloved wife
who will like always
him slice!
that is the only
b'coz of married life
O what a price

freedom freedom, freedom
now we all
become dumb...
just ask anyone!
Amen

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