This poem offers a reflective look at the speaker's journey of self-discovery. The imagery of a train in the distance and the speaker's sigh create a sense of nostalgia and longing. The poem then details a shift in perspective, as the speaker finds solace in reconnecting with something divine. The line "my heart is believing/in refreshing new vistas, my mind is conceiving" offers a hopeful conclusion to the poem. Suggested line edit: Replace "old fashioned" with "forgotten".

Overall, this is an emotionally powerful poem that conveys a sense of growth and understanding. The language is vivid and expressive, and the imagery helps to create a strong emotional connection to the speaker's journey. The poem's structure is effective in conveying the speaker's journey from loneliness to hope. The suggested line edit enhances the poem by providing a more powerful and accurate description of the speaker's emotions.

and near-rhyme, preclude this from being free-verse,
but it is very good. It just needs a little bit of adjustment.
I do hope the you haven't called this free-verse, in order to escape the tedium of
making sure that the meter is good. I like the theme and hope that you will consider
doing a little more work on it.

I can give you an example of what I mean:

a train in the distance makes a lonely cry
you sit all alone, heaving big sighs
when you were young, your life, it had passion
for people and friends, now that just seems old fashioned

Having good friends to help you through such a tough time, must have helped immensely.
I am glad that you have managed to have a productive, stable life and raise a family
Good on you and your friends!

This has good potential. ~ Geezer.
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I liked the poem. I sincerely hopeyou have long passed your high school situation.
As to form, I am also learning what forms to use and to determine the best form for poems I try to write.
Keep going!

I was also one of those teens who spent most of their time cooped up in their room, spiraling downward. I still spend a lot of time in my room, but I've learned to cope better. I like the solitude and quiet sometimes, because I don't get much of either in my career (teacher/tutor).

Now coming home and going to my room tends to be a peaceful and relaxing way to unwind instead of a way to escape reality. Writing helped pull me out of some dark and lonely places.

Thank you for sharing,
Kelsey

I can relate to this poem as I was the teenager who spent a lot of time in her room as well. Writing has been an amazing outlet for me even as an adult and gave me a safe place to express my emotions, even when it didn't make much sense. I like how you conveyed the feelings of loneliness and isolation than turned it into something positive with thoughts of new hope. Well done.