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My Romanian Lover
My Romanian Lover
This is the most widely read one
My Romanian lover
Through the garden path I walked
she sat astride the bench
quiet, silent and cute
her chubby dog so mute
I walked unknowingly
a short nap
oldie me
how she saw me
then rested on the opposite side
on an isolated branch of a tree
as I closed my eyes in reverie
she came alongside
and calmly sat beside
without any fear
as she smiled
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2019-08-26 01:19
The whole of the poem is in
"My Romanian Lover
This is the most widely read one
My Romanian lover
Through the garden path I walked
she sat astride the bench
quiet, silent and cute
her chubby dog so mute
I walked unknowingly
a short nap
oldie me
how she saw me
then rested on the opposite side
on an isolated branch of a tree
as I closed my eyes in reverie
she came alongside
and calmly sat beside
without any fear
as she smiled"
Definitely one of your Jewels my friend, all the rest is crap and adornment, I feel a severe pruning is needed.
cheers,
Jess
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lovedly
Mon, 2019-08-26 11:14
kindness jess after a long time
you walked my page and found a jewel.
since edited master