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My new year's Resolution

I won't remain the same,
I won't endure the pain,
I won't beg for friendship,
Free to leave or to stay,
I won't send out my emotions,
I will build them a place,
Somewhere beyond the seven oceans,
Far away from people's gaze.

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this is very nice...I like the simplistic approach you have taken!

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you I am grateful

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The rhythm and pacing are great. I liked the theme and I think there is a clear thought conveyed here with a definite beginning and end. I really like the ideas about sitting with your feelings instead of reacting and letting them control you. I like the part about not begging for friendship, that’s personal for me at this stage in my life. I’m learning to let things come in their time. This is a really motivating poem.

Tim

Rosewood

Thank you I really appreciate, truly its better to communicate with oneself than expressing it or complaining unnecessarily

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Good flow and good resolutions. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Thank you

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