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My Love My Rotting Leaves (round robin)

Her service now concluded
I took my sullen solitude
Walked with it for quite awhile
We both got lost within the mood

Wondering what might have been
If budding love had bloomed
Questions rot like fallen leaves
Within my laden heart entombed

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

excellent rhyming. the flow carries the reader smoothly along. great job of keeping the mood! favorite lines are:

Questions rot like fallen leaves
Within my laden heart entombed

*hugs, Cat

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In keeping with the theme and the mood. I was wondering how you would keep it going. Now it it's going to Carrie and hopefully, she will be able to conclude it successfully. Upon the conclusion, I think that we shall try to open a workshop and it will let us have a few more people. Nice job, ~ Geez.
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