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My First Journey Ever

There is nothing herein which should be interpreted as a statement that the subject possesses prior cognisance
of the surroundings or situation described.

This First Ever Journey.

This is the point,
the point of no return.
The unassailable drawbridge
finally came down.
Now we go in en-mass.
The time being right,
we carry the hopes and dreams
along the way.
We carry them with us.
We carry them for others, too.

This was not only a leap of faith for them.
We too, have to have a degree
of faith in our own ability.
We are more than simple messengers.
We bring the gift of our whole selves.
We are the spearheaded
who carry along with us,
our future as yet, still furled.

Each of us, in these moments
are Athleticism Aquarius.
We are swimming for our lives,
indeed for everyones invested interest.
One of us, blind as we presemtly are,
will be triumphant, eventually.

For now the journey is slowing.
For me, it is as though I have
become embedded in a wall.
A soft cellular wall.
And overcome
I feel compelled to rest here for a while.

This is the test of the millions.
Mostly we are fit and well.
We all know our goal.
Some sports, egg others onward.
I will stay here for a while.
It is out of my hands.

Sooner than later,
I am back in the swim.
We are all in concert.
Some of us are brotherly,
others of us sisterly,
and what ever the outcome,
we are most certainly family.

Though we are
only one half of the puzzle,
together we advance
with a common hope.
All of us have the knowledge of the lock.
This is key to whoever it is
who makes the winning move.

Now the end comes into sight.
Though there is no sense
of a finishing line.
There is among us
a strong shared sense of purpose.
Each of us knows why we are here.
Each one of the group,
though as yet incomplete,
have the drive to achieve wholeness.
For now the limited life we have
is not enough.
This fact has come to realisation
with the sighting of the prize.

We each seek
the prize for a shared reason,
that being a need for an opportunity
to attain uniqueness of life, as a person.
To be a Gem in the Universe.

And so here I am.
I surge to complete my plunge.
I have all the information I need
to become complete.
Success is all about
making an effective entry.
This is it, my planned impact.

I am now living as an insider.
I have successfully
traversed the singularity
of the then, to now.
We are one.
Now the great changes may begin.

All we need now is a little time
for things to progress.
The outcome we hope for
is to become me.

Life is more than being
a staged union of X’s and Y’s.
But this is a start.

When it is time for me to return,
back the way I came,
then this phase will be over.

The winner will emerge.
Then the love truly begins.
In this regard
we are all winners by birth.

Pryderi ap Duntz.

07/02/23. Devon. England.

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Comments

The language is great. Give it another read through, you have a few obvious typos. I would rearrange the lines for better delivery. It feels like it needs to breathe more. I can help with that if you’d like.

Tim

Tim, thank you for your advise and comments. I do appreciate your responding to the piece.

I have actioned your guidance re typos.

The structure is also altered a little. This is due in part to formatting from .docx into the website.

Further feedback would be welcomed.

Thanks again for your pointers.

Chris T. PaD

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