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The Murder in Sixth Street Alley Part 3

To my knees I dropped
Making nary a sound
Crawling on all fours
When suddenly there came a thump
My blood froze as I moved along
The killer was close but not close enough
That they could see
The trap door waiting for me
I reached out with a shaky grasp
Down the fire pole
With a noiseless gasp
Freedom at last

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Free verse
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Part 3 for your reading pleasure!
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I could move from it.
Nice job!
Mark

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I think that the murderer will have a devil of a time, deducing where it is that you have gone. No time to think, just move.
We all await with bated breath, the chase is on! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Seems to have a sinister side...trap doors...fire poles....let's see if he outsmarts our killer

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