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Murder Me Not (Round Robin Part 1)

A sliver of silver through the sheers,
faint breeze tickling my nose
dream sequence abandoning me
as the nightmare begins to unfold
I didn't hear him coming
feet that never made a sound
all I remember is his hot breath upon my neck
callous fingers that took hold
claw marks decorated his face, dripping all my rage
through bloody eyes, it was hard for him to see
what i pulled out from under my pillow
what could it be

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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Here is my attempt at beginning a Round Robin :) Enjoy!
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Not Explicit Content

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That ought to do. You left a perfectly answerable question. I think this goes to Mark?

Leaves room for creativity and to flip the script if need be

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That is the question…

Are we?

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under the pillow huh
well I've seen a lot of reaching for that place Teehee
What could it be?
We'll know soon
Mark

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What it is!!! I'm on the edge of my seat

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made each of my lines a rhyme couplet to your lines :~)
Thanks , it worked out pretty good,
Mark

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Was a good surprise! A step away from our traditional methods of murder! You did great.

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what you have here is a very good start! I love the suspenseful footprints you have left for Mark to follow. I hope I can do as well. am I after Mark?

always, Cat
ever, eddy

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I am not sure whose next. May need to check with Gee?

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sent him a p.m. I'm nervous...

*hugs, Cat

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Geezer
Rosewood
RoseBlack
Mark
Cat

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this morning. so...is it back to Geezer or does he start a new one?

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I need some time like up to 24 hours or so.
Mark

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that's ok with me. I don't think we have a deadline.

*hugs, Cat

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He’s next then I finish was the plan. Mark starts next round

good

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