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Misfire

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Sun, 2020-12-06 20:09

I couldn’t think of much else;
why she left, what I did wrong

It was only obvious some years later,
after more experience with wars of the heart,
it had everything to do with being eighteen

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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Tue, 2020-12-08 07:43

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about the title, but it drew me in and that's it's job. So I guess... Words of wisdom from the owner of a broken heart. We all
get them, and I guess that eighteen is one of the hardest times. Good write, nothing much to critique as it is a short one. Looking forward to seeing more from you. Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Michael Anthony

Tue, 2020-12-08 10:58

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Appreciate your thoughts Geezer. The title was intended to note failure. In this case the subject of the poem. Thanks again, and be well.

Michael Anthony

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