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A Miracle In Breath

I see a miracle everywhere I look

In every flower and every brook

I see it in every tree growing tall

I hear it in every bird as it calls

I feel it deep in every breath

I see it in every birth and death

It is miraculous every night; I survive

It is miraculous every day; I am alive

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I feel a miracle here. I am so glad that you have found somewhere to be, a place that values you. Keep writing, we will keep reading. ~ Geezer.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

We never know when our time is up. And an attitude of gratitude could save this world.
Welcome, it's great to see you,
Mark

If not now when!
Someday I'll be a poet.

This was absolutely fantastic and I think my favorite piece by you to date. I love how your perspective has shifted in this write and you have found something positive in every day! So glad you found your home here on Neo!

~RoseBlack~

Thanks for reading and the nice comment. I appreciate being here.

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Only problem is the word 'calls' in L4

Perhaps something like "I hear it in every LONELY bird CALL" instead?
or maybe 'echoing' instead or 'lonely', or perhaps 'far off'? Something like that.

Respectfully, Race

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

Thanks for the comment and input Race

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This is great. I love the theme. You’re a tight rhymer so this one fits into your style well but it’s very up lifting. I understand the lens through which you’re writing here and it’s one of my favorite moods.

Excellent
Tim

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