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Mind and confusion

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2023-02-28 12:35

Last night my mind revolved
about its own inner axis
I couldn't make out
what happened

went off to sleep

A rested mind woke me up
smile
it's sunrise

I smiled pulled all curtains
windows were wide open
swarm of bees came in
Queen Bee...
also smiled ...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-28 20:18

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Hello, Lovedly,
A lovely abstract poem with a very appropriate title. I did see the sunrise when the curtains were pulled back, and the happy smile on the Queen Bee.
Thank you!
Lav

lovedly

Wed, 2023-03-01 00:58

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Thanks Lav nice comment as bright as the sun lol

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Ekaterina Alexa...

Wed, 2023-03-01 09:48

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Hey Lovedly,
That first stanza is really great! It hooks the reader in for sure. A very enjoyable poem, but watch out for those bees Xxx

lovedly

Wed, 2023-03-01 11:20

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bees could sting and leave no honey
still welcome em as Queen
will also be coming lol

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-03-01 10:23

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bees to make honey. Lovedly will frolic with the bees and eat honey all the days of his life. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

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