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a million little fires

when I see your face a wildfire sparks in my soul

your voice calms, but starts another in my heart

when I feel your touch, my body erupts like a volcano that has been sleeping for years

when I lie next to you the world could burn and I'd be perfectly content

you are equally the fire starter and fighter.

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I like your poem but the title leads me to expect more comparisons

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