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Midnight song
pause of time:
hark!
through the mid
night
wide awaken birds
sing;
the moon shines
away
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
À la manière de ee. cummings’ “The Red Wheelbarrow”
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
scribbler
Mon, 2022-01-03 12:42
Hmmmm
I'm a bit unsure what to think about this but figured I'd let you know I dropped by......stan
arjiris.f.
Tue, 2022-01-04 09:32
Thank you. It’s more like a
Thank you. It’s more like a creative writing exercise, where I took a famous poem and create something similar. Either way, this poem’s concept, as well as its original, is to capture the moment,
to “shoot” a living image.
author commentscribbler
Tue, 2022-01-04 10:14
Hmmm.....
an expanded Haiku then?
arjiris.f.
Wed, 2022-01-05 01:57
Yes, kind of.
Yes, kind of.
author commentJackweb
Thu, 2022-01-06 02:53
Creative moment
Mostly, creative writers embraces midnight as a preferred atmosphere for creating their thoughts on paper. But here it seems you lost the idea or the subject You intend to write. (E.g) ...the moon shines away!
Onyinyechi Cosmos