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lumbering silence in Bodnar's

Thick and grey, lumbering hulks
trumpet the silence....

We don't talk about the elephant
in the living room, it would disturb
the feng shui, wouldn't it?
You and I belong in our designer kitchens
don't we, naked with the pots and pans
just washed and scrubbed and shiny,
clinging to images we have
of ourselves, Americans to the hilt
of our absurdity.
We don't get to buy a two-way ticket
to return things to how they once were,
before the open air prison of our streets,
our homes and neighborhoods.

We can't do over this reality.

We just put lipstick on the corpse and say "she looks good"
or shake our heads in disbelief "how he must have suffered".
The weapon and the injury hidden from view. The flowers' scents
overwhelming, distracting us from seeing the dead's last walkabout
the parlor.

Last few words: 
Please watch these two Ted Talks and please pass them along.... [youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8tEuaj4h8dw&feature=relmfu[/youtube] Aaron Huey: America's native prisoners of war [youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c2tOp7OxyQ8[/youtube] Byran Stevensen We need to talk about an injustice
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your poetry is shit.
Work on it.
I refuse to accept any of your excuses.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Fuck off! And I mean that in the nicest way.

~ !!

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and you are too lazy to work on your poetry.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

You know what, dear Jess? My content is my poetry and my poetry is my content, they are inseparable.

Should I alert you to that fact, now?

~A

p.s. Glad to see you quoting my favourite quote, again.

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time for some generic apologies for all my comments over the last few days.

still... I would dearly love to see some prosodic values in your verse,

love you dearly,

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Not more than I do you.

Prosaic prosetry prasad in the poetry punctuates poems.

~A

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