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A Love Poem For You ~ Petrichor 6

1. Like Solitary Creatures Weeping

I am drenched with melancholy by the summer rain
when the sky opens up and moves the
furniture of my mind around with an easy grace.
The scent of heaven
conjures up a frayed and torn duffel bag of words,
I resist the temptation to write another poem, but I am
not forlorn.

By the river that empties into the sea,
I leave three words
for you in the sand.
The tide will wash them away, but not
before we break into waves
and crash against the dark grey sky.

2. For Him

God, man
how you love to throw me
off-centre,
plunge into the abyss that contains
me
but does not define me.

I love the lightning flashes
against my closed eyes.
I love my poetic convulsions
deep into the rhythm of your style.

I love the heat of your hands
against me, inflaming me
engorging you.

I love how we fit together
and how we come apart,
drenched inside the river
of our contentment

as we leave just a little fire
to smolder
and heat our imagination

as you go your way
and I stay
writing poems to the poet
who steals words from my mouth
and seals it with his kiss

as he paints
on the canvas that is life itself,
floating on an easel
far far away,
in a land we have yet to conquer.

3. I Wanted to Wear Your Smile

Two days ago
when the moon was full,
after it rained and the walls
were broken of their silence,
a single sparrow spoke of morning.
His plaintive song saddened me
as if the summer's
end was beating in his heart
and I longed for your touch
so far away, straining to be
heard. And I wanted
wings to draw your nearer.
I wanted to wear your smile.
I wanted to feel you just as I
do now.

Editing stage: 

Comments

"..moves the chattels of my mind
with grace and ease..

"this scent of heaven
conjuring word torn duffel
frayed and worn

resisting me from temptations
for poems
for I am not forlorn

at Our river that lends itself to sea
I leave Three words
language in sand.."

Just some of my adaptation of your
poem Kailashana

You know all of this is not HOW I would
like your poem to read
Nor of course are we trying to tell the
poet how to write

I am using what I feel from your works
and spinning this version of it

I really like this poem
I can feel it

Thank You!

and I was delighted by what I found in Wikipedia
"Petrichor is the scent of rain on dry earth. The word is constructed from Greek, petra, meaning stone + ichor, the fluid that flows in the veins of the gods in Greek mythology.

The term was coined in 1964 by two Australian researchers, Bear and Thomas, for an article in the journal Nature.[1] In the article, the authors describe how the smell derives from an oil exuded by certain plants during dry periods, whereupon it is absorbed by clay-based soils and rocks. During rain, the oil is released into the air along with another compound, geosmin, a metabolic by-product of bacteria, which is emitted by wet soil, producing the distinctive scent; ozone may also be present if there is lightning.[2] In a follow-up paper, Bear and Thomas (1965) showed that the oil retards seed germination and early plant growth.[3]"

Why 6?

1. Like Solitary Creatures Weeping
Would I be too cliched in guessing the three words were "I love you" or would you rather leave that a mystery?

2. For Him
forgive my crassness, but it gave me a poetic hard-on, with that slight sense of shame every artist feels when they place their art above their people.

3. I Wanted to Wear Your Smile
As simple and elegant a love poem as ever written in Japanese. You know such works do not touch me often. This did.

cheers,
Jess
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"moves my furniture of thoughts about
with easy grace..
perfumed of heaven and
conjured frayed and torn duffel bag of words"
the rest of your linework here is excellent I think

interesting how it changes
for me How I can leave and return to a read
and interpret something new
and love the old

Thank You!

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