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Love - Common
Eyes, dark violet,
flower.
I am here my dear.
Nothing matters anymore,
each of us will go its own way.
But, know. My words,
Your dances, our tears,
Will go someday to the meter
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
Mon, 2022-08-01 13:57
This leaves me wanting more
there are all sorts of directions this could go in. Please edit and add to it?
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