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LOTS OF GUYS I SEE LOVE MANGOES MAINLY

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2022-07-11 20:18

A seasoned old poet's poem
pertains to sweet dangling mangoes

our life also grows and flows
like ripened mangoes
juices down our mouths
all laugh
and
say juicy mangoes eh
and
smile
as we suck dry
their stones

(An Aussie gal loved mangoes
ate one daily in the train)

we blush still for more juicy ones
rush for more mangoes
juicier
what
wow
mangoes
what else

compare our lives with the fruit ah
many more years to go

let's enjoy life
and
compare it with mangoes
here I go
and
a plantation grow
seeds I sow
for future generations
they must know
we all loved
and
they will
ancestors mangoes

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

MANGOES are metaphorical here GO enjoy

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Tue, 2022-07-12 01:10

A fruit that...

I've enjoyed for many years. I do believe that I will continue to enjoy them until the day I end my tragic existence on this wretched planet! One of the few pleasures in life! Good use of metaphoricals. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Tue, 2022-07-12 11:41