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A Little Nostalgia

Submitted by Sen99 on Tue, 2022-09-27 09:22

Many years ago, down old Harriet Lane
No remains of a nonesuch
Pathfinders lost their way
Didn’t live to be a legend

Harriet lane has had her day
Signs taken down and that road is closed
Went overtime and couldn’t stay well beyond the welcome
Pioneers did pave the way now its just a dead end

Mystery and no last page
Never see the like again
Once upon a golden age
Last alive down Harriet Lane

Remember how the lovers stroll
Courtship failed with Johnny’s girl
Down the hill and the bodies rolled
Stiffs out cold with a fatal fuck
Reruns blurred and the film is old
Lost, forgotten and gone

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