Were it me I'd split the rhyming verses into two verses.I like the idea conveyed of existing for existence's sake only. Would also reccomend adding just in front of exist in L-5............stan

love this, quite extraordinarily different direction for you, prosodic values blossoming

This is an interesting piece, beautiful imagery, but I can't place it, so I read and read again. Well done

tr

Interesting images Paul as always, with an air of purity and quit relevant, indeed, to the surrounding circumstances of our existential predicament and a concise reminder of what is essential in life.

Interesting and very different for you. I see a whole new person emerging