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Life Can Change

It's funny how fast your life can change
How fast you can be flipped upside down
One minute you're working and smiling
And the next you're lying on the ground

That was me, I was living a happy life
But then my dream took me by surprise
From then on I had a hunger for success
It took quite a while for me to realize

Sometimes we think we're falling apart
Our worlds are only falling into place
I worked my body into the ground
And my dreams I continued to chase

All that hard work finally worked in my favor
The day came for the tables to rearrange
I've said it before, and I'll say it again
It's funny how fast your Life Can Change

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And so we seize opportunities and shun disparaging opinions both external and internal.

You’re a very good writer,
Tim

I don't feel very good but thank you, I really appreciate the kind words!

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I sure will. You do the same! Never give up no matter what! Thank you for the words of encouragement, I really appreciate it!

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