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In the Land of James and Ruby Sky

I wish you would fly me to your castle
Wings of eagles push me as a cloud
Softly I fall pillowed and finding that
You’re the warmth of a tropical waterfall

Street lights and pianos you are Rhapsody in Blue
I wish to go deeper into the melodies of you
Dance along sprinkle rain down a main street
Or an avenue meant for us to meet

As deep as can be I feel you blue and true
Where peacocks and flutterbys
Feel your whisper of silence for royal red roses
Framed with parrots knowing they are home

In the land of James and Ruby Sky
Where vision is a foreign language
That everybody finds attractive
Unknowingly we exist

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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and Ruby Sky is a perfectly intriguing title. I wish I knew where it is. I think I'd like to sail there.

Thomas like my lost dreams...the flood

I won't even need to cast off. Cool take on the challenge, mister.

Thomas like my lost dreams...the flood

I've read this four times now and it get better every time,
I like that you leave it to the reader as to where the punctuation should be,

Glad to report that its ambiguous enough to leave me wanting more!!


Surrealistic indeed! Enjoyed this one Mark! Outstanding lines:
- Or an avenue meant for me and you
- Where vision is a foreign language that everybody finds attractive

These are where the poetry lies for me - well done!


Michael Anthony

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