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Lady Autumn

Lady Autumn

The steel-bladed foe
Of Indian Summer's hammer of heat
Slowly digested in the sun infused waves
Of smoldering riotous colors.
Lady Autumn drapes her earthy mantle
Across her lovely shoulders
As she weaves a magical spell
of migrant portents
Leaves splashed vibrantly
With living variegated gypsy fire
Filling the whirling sky
With the season's victorious changes.
Enthroned on the crest of her gale,
Rising up in her Queenly fashion
Time stopped ever briefly in hushed reverence
As nature's orchestra commenced the Autumnal epic
Of the opera of Lady Autumn's seasonal reign

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with extra profound language used quite exquisitely .

You gave Autumn a special charm when you capture it as a Lady Not a Mister LOL

Line seven I would say  As she reads a megical spell ..instead of weaves

but again it is my humble opinion (weave is more poetic I admit)

and great closing lines which seduce me to re read again and again

Time stopped ever briefly in hushed reverence
 As nature's orchestra commenced the Autumnal epic
 Of the opera of Lady Autumn's seasonal reign

One little thing
I think you really need a space between the title and the first line because as it is now it Lady Autumn reads as if part of the first line I believe or is it intended as it is?

Very much enjoyed this read dear Cat

Have the best of luck with your new book..

 

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Thank you very much for your suggestions, and for reading! The space was much needed between the title and the first line of the poem. I need to think on reads and weaves. Your thoughts and suggestions are always welcome!

always, Cat

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It is so very good to hear from you, my most loyal reader! Thank you!

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I could visualize the drive from Montreal to
Terrebonne
what a LADY autumn one does see driving in exoticity the flowering robes outstretched beyond of what eyes can pry
the distant calls beckons come by and the sprawling rainbows
as if they were for real upon leaves of many a hue
all colours fresh and new like a veil upon a newly wedded female
cast away the bridegrooms loneliness.. as she kneels down to show the hues she wanted to
how beautifully they grow in the naturalness of admiration …as we drive through the wilderness… lady Autumn beckons us and smiles too
Sir come and enjoy nature will you … a smile across my face did spread… as I was about to leave the roadside
but for the ladies charms I am still alive ….ere would've been dead no surprise..
rise lady autumn did say then I did with magnanimity and teary eyes.

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That's Beautiful!!!

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This morning it is all yellows and the mauve and grey of the bare limbs
I find your "lady autumn" is here!!

I liked the ending on this poem
its very fitting and well paced to the
body of the work

enjoyable and thought provoking

Thank You

It is wonderful that you have your own version of Lady Autumn in your life! Thank you for sharing with me!

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Beautiful personification of autumn. Only change I'd suggest is to consider breaking int stanzas............stan

I'll give your suggestion some consideration :)

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Cat
where once in a while
in the universe we all call wilderness,
thou escapist to make folks wonder
where the poet has eloped
and when the return is un-sounded
hearts begin to thump again
poets like me are grounded
is it you once again?
I can't believe my weary eyes
some tear drops always remain,
anyhow that's my luck
twill always so remain...
those who love me are very few
almost nil 'tis true
but for you I can't ever say it
thanks for coming across the stream again
but you write once in a while
whereas we all do time and again
but dare not have the nerve
to catch your vein

loved

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