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Lady...

Lady...

a piece of
the Celestial Mother
prevalent
in all womankind
the precious spark
you'll always find
in her lucent face
mistress moon
she is one with
her daughters
flowing
with the waters
of life
like creamy jade
she shall be
my muse
from now
until I fade.

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I can feel your mutual interaction in this piece. Unique creation with unique selection of words like:
" The celestial mother",
"The precious spark",
"In her lucent face",
"Mistress moon",

Excellence, brilliance is embedded in this piece of writing. Any time your poem appear in a short form, is always a boom (Amazing...!)
.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

I'm so glad you liked my poem of the three ladies in this pantheon. thank you for reading and commenting.

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I don't mind reading this piece again and again. I'm sure I read it and commented on earlier. I thought maybe you've reposted for the purpose of the contest. Any way, I enjoyed reading it. It has a magical music to it.
A competitive entry indeed.
Best wishes dear.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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thank you for your response, I am grateful! sorry It took me so long to respond to your comment.

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Hello, Cat,
This has a smooth, rich flow to it. I especially like the short sentences which make the poem trickle down the page. Creamy jade...lovely language.
L

dear L, I very much look forward to your comments!

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Such a beautifully written, elegant piece. It embraces the many roles of womanhood. Really enjoyed it.

~RoseBlack~

I'm glad you could relate to it :)

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This is just magnificent, I offer nothing but praise for a beautiful write.

Brava!!

Love Always Jayne.

P.s. yep I am slowly going through what I've missed lol

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

sweet Lady Jayne! I'm glad it pleased you!

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