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Lady...

Submitted by Candlewitch on Wed, 2022-12-14 07:35

a piece of
the Celestial Mother
prevalent
in all womankind
the precious spark
you'll always find
in her lucent face
mistress moon
she is one with
her daughters
flowing
with the waters
of life
like creamy jade
she shall be
my muse
from now
until I fade.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was my language use?

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2022-12-14 08:23

Gorgeous

Can’t really find a thing I’d change. I love it.

Tim

Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 06:57

dear Tim,

I'm so glad, thank you!

*hugs, Cat

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Geezer

Wed, 2022-12-14 09:38

Nice stuff...

Like Tim, I can't find a thing that I would change. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 06:59

high praise,

my dear (and appreciated) friend!

*hugs, Cat

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Lavender

Wed, 2022-12-14 18:38

Lady...

Hi, Cat,
I agree. This is pure and beautiful.
L

Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 07:01

:)

* many hugs and much love, Cat

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Rula

Thu, 2022-12-15 03:46

The

music through out along with the language used , wow.
Just my cup of tea dear Cat!

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 07:03

thank you,

*I bow to you, Lady Rula, much love, Cat

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-12-15 07:55

good

but Gee calls my FREESTYLE
amateurish
SAD NO
Cats

Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 07:59

you must have misunderstood him,

I call it youthful, innocent and fresh, like a breath of fresh air... and the young do have a wisdom all their own.

Love, Cat

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-12-15 10:35

Indeed...

he has my respect, but writes with so many innuendos and euphemisms, that he finds it hard to accept that some do not.
He thinks that I consider him amateurish, when I feel he is anything but. Sometimes, I wish he would write with a little more clarity, but beyond that... ~ Geez.

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 13:24