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Killing the Jungle

no matter
who owns it now
the trees are falling
lopped off by huge machines
(steel has no fondness for life)
wipe out the great lush green jungle
to put in a road and a pipeline
communities are killed by greedy men

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
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your title to be simple without making me search for the meaning. [I like that].
Your simplistic piece, contains all one needs to get the message and the thoughts contained within.
I especially liked the aside that [steel has no fondness for life]. I'm not sure if the layout was purposely made
to echo the thought of simply life and land then increasingly complex lines to mimic the threat of man and machines
but it certainly did that. Nice work, nothing to crit.~ Geez.

When you are writing for the Random Challenge!
Example: "I Need To Recharge" is prompt.
title is "Plugging In" It should appear this way:
"Plugging In" - Random Challenge/ I Need To Recharge

actually it is an Etheree type poem. Starts with a one syllable line and progresses to 10.
I hadn't thought of it your way, but yes!

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Your words speak volumes of truth The balance of nature to mans greed is way off but where and what is the solution


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Man is such a destructive animal huh?

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We hear so much about the destruction of equatorial jungles but ignore the cutting of the temperate jungles here at home. Any suggestions I'd make would mess up the form of your poem

Thanks for dropping in,

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We haman's are naturally greedy, we consume more than we produce and that is affecting us in one way or another. It's a good one.

It has been said that we are more like a virus..

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