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Just A Dream [When I wake up in the morning]

Submitted by Walten on Wed, 2022-11-16 15:59

When I wake up in the morning,
I am happy to see their faces
After years,
And years,
And years…

Finally fulfilling our dreams.
Literally.

We loved our new lives,
Away from everyone
So we can do whatever we want
Without anyone telling us what to do

Finally, we were somewhere where we were able
To be ourselves.

But then, I woke up,
With the bright light beaming on my face,
Slightly hurting my eyes

And as I slowly started to process my dream,
Tears started to form, as I stare up high

“If only I can see your faces
One last time.”

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Eden Guthrie

Thu, 2022-11-24 22:41

I liked everything about this poem. I love the melancholy touch to it and the way its put together

RoseBlack

Fri, 2022-11-25 05:03

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We try so hard to become independent to only realize we wish we had more time with someone.

~RoseBlack~

Lavender

Sun, 2022-11-27 10:57

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Hello, Walten,
You've captured the true meaning of companionship, and the true loss.
Thank you,
Lavender

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