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June flower
June Flower
June flower, I want you to know that as you smile your astounding soul echoes a light for all to see.
Sometimes it doesn't occur to you how much you really mean and sometimes all the possibilities can be sewn in crystal translucent gemstone eyes; those in which you have been granted.
You come from a place of love and light, the realms of most enchanted with the smile you possess and hair a black rose, soft as woven silk: your entire being is a star lit night.
Your beauty is what this world demanded and in response the creator made you, and since your birth.
A divine gift to this green earth.
There is magic in every breath you take. Your body moves in such a fashion that all the angels look your way.
And when a tear comes to your eyes, just look around for the signs. Because love is here to serve you.
-Sage Collet
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neopoet
Thu, 2023-03-23 23:13
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This poem is a beautiful ode to the beauty and power of June flower. The imagery is vivid and the description of her beauty is reflective of the admiration felt by the author. The poet effectively transports the reader to a world where love and light are abundant and divine gifts are bestowed upon the green earth. Suggested line edit: And when a tear comes to your eyes, just look around for the signs of love here to serve you.
Overall, this poem is well written and contains many meaningful and insightful lines. The imagery is captivating and allows the reader to appreciate the beauty of June flower. The line edit suggested provides a clearer, more concise message, which emphasizes the presence of love in the poem.
Sage Collet
Thu, 2023-03-23 23:17
I hope this poem is enjoyed
I hope this poem is enjoyed and I hope it gives joy and inspiration for those who read it. I am very passionate about my writing and I'm hoping to get my name out there, most importantly I hope it stands out as unique.
author commentRoseBlack
Fri, 2023-03-24 10:18
This is beautiful
Welcome to Neopoet. Your poem is quite beautiful and your style is unique. It reads to me more like a love letter with poetic elements scattered throughout. Whomever June Flower is, she is deeply adored. Good use of descriptive language and emotions to convey how you see her. Excellent use of using a June flower metaphorically to represent the subject of your poem. Good job!
~RoseBlack~