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You’re gonna burn with Jesus-Fire.
(Honestly, I ain’t no liar!)
But if you make Him Lord and Master,
you’ll dodge damnation’s dread disaster.

You're gonna live, and live forever,
when slender strand will snap and sever
your soul from body, you’ve been used to,
you're gonna sup some savage strange brew

unless you trust the man, J.C.
(From fascist fears He’ll set you free!)
And when that bitter bonfire’s burning,
the wages that your sins were earning,

you won't be banking; there's no needing:
Jesus Christ’s done all the bleeding!
Forget the pope, the priests, the church.
Despite what science says, you search!

You’re gonna burn with Jesus-Fire.
Your situation’s dark and dire.
Let losers scoff and cynics sneer.
you come to Christ. Salvation’s here.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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the fearless poet-preacher gives it you between the eyes
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Jesus-Fire" is a religious piece that seeks to persuade readers to accept Jesus Christ as their savior to avoid eternal damnation. The use of rhyme and repetition in the poem adds emphasis to the message, making it memorable. The poem's tone is serious, and the author employs a direct approach to get their point across.

However, the poem's language can be seen as exclusionary and divisive, as it dismisses other religious figures and beliefs. The line "Forget the pope, the priests, the church" may be offensive to some readers and could have been expressed differently to avoid alienating them.

Overall, the poem is effective in its message, but it could benefit from a more inclusive tone. One suggested line edit could be "Despite what others say, you search" to avoid dismissing science or other beliefs.

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Fearless indeed! I feel the fire and energy! The lines that seem to touch me the most are the ones that AI warns may be offensive, but necessary to truly know the depth of faith:
"Forget the pope, the priest, the church,
despite what science says, you search!" Always...

Thank you, yeah Neo is correct - politically and in tune with the present cultural climate. However, the message IS exclusive: One way JC! Again, thanks for stopping by and staying with me. I suspect that I will not win fans this way. lol


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Good poem mate, I really enjoyed the passion and the poke in the eye.

Thanks Obi.


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