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IT IS YOUR SMILE

Your smile opens the window of my joy
your smile unearthed your hidden beauty
your smile quenches my negative attitude
and your smile is the signature of your habit

your smile is the highway I can't over take
whenever you smile the atmosphere changes
into vicinity of undying love of power
your smile travels beyond the kilometer

I have seized to hate or anger in my stupidity
your facial expression and smile has adorned
into statue of liberty of celebration and likes
for your joy of smile and expression kindles

for it is your smile that made me stare
I have conclusively desire to keep looking
your scintillating loveliness of your honesty
embalms my attention into perpetual lover

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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S2 L1 remove the space between high way (highway)
in this line: for it is your smile that made me to stare
remove (to)
my favorite lines are:
Your smile opens the window of my joy
your smile unearthens your hidden beauty
your smile quenches my negative attitude
and your smile is the signature of your habit
I'm not sure (unearthens) is spelled correctly or if it is a real word.

*hugs, Cat

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I will verify on the word (unearthens)

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Cat you are so versatile! The word unearthens is totally wrong. Thank you for pointing out. I'm grateful

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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any time, no problem :)

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